The Monster, Inc. (Updated)
With a name like James P. Sullivan,
Big, blue giant I am.
Fur crammed with floating purple dots,
Two horns and an overbearing tail.
With a roar of a gorilla, stretching across all of Mars.
Scare those who run free.
Many may call me a monster.
Encounters with a planet that contains the lungs of children.
Which is my lands energy.
Check under my chestnut bed.
Close the doors.
Check inside my pink flowered print sheets.
Put on my eye-mask.
Check the bottom of my overflowing hamper.
Insert the earbuds.
Boo
Hey that’s my name
BOO! I am a scary monster
Your no monster, you my teddy bear
BOOOOO! .... DON’T TOUCH ME!
Okay, now I scream, you bad
Ahh
Mom, Dad save me, monster here!
Eeeekkk
Why you have to be so mean Sully?
Noooo
Go away Sully, you no live in this world.
Wahhhh
The faces of children fill my inner mesh with pain.
I might be the cause of their nightmares but they have the toxic touch.
I am the big, blue giant.
I am expected to be the best.
I am the school jock, and the ultimate cool guy of every generation.
But my thoughts don’t measure my outer façade.
I believe the children matter.
And not just to be scared. The Monster. Inc. (Original)
With a name like James P. Sullivan,
Big, blue giant I am.
With a roar of a gorilla, stretching across all of Mars.
Scare those who run free.
With encounters with a planet that contains the lungs of children.
Which is my lands energy.
Check under my light chestnut bed.
Close the doors.
Check inside my pink flowered print sheets.
Put on my eyemask.
Check the bottom of my overflowing hamper.
Insert the earbuds.
Ahhhh
Mom, Dad save me the monster is here!
Eeeekkk
Why do you have to be so mean Sully?
Noooo
Go away Sully, you dont live in this world.
Wahhhhh
The faces of children fill my inner mesh with pain.
I am the big, blue giant.
I am the big, blue giant.
I am expected to be the best.
I believe the children matter.
And not just to be scared.
This was a great post. Major props for taking on an actual monster-because since he is a monster that we know already, it might be hard to personify him more and give us detail beyond what we can get from seeing him on the screen. I like how you incorporated a more formal poem structure into the larger poem. I also really enjoyed the playful tone that the poem has. Since it's also supposed to be like an encyclopedia entry, i would maybe include more information type stuff like more about where he comes from, what things he likes, his tendencies etc. Really great job!!
ReplyDeleteHi Elicia. Good start on this poem, but it does feel like a start to me. This poem is looser and easier in feel than most of your previous poems, which means it should be longer. It's hard to pull this kind of thing off using loose "talky" language with such a small canvas to work with. This begs for more!
ReplyDeleteWhat is his inner life like? What does he think about that wasn't captured in the movie? There is a lot you can do with this.
I had an idea. You could use the Pixar wiki entry for this monster for cool and interesting details to add to the poem. Check it out:
http://pixar.wikia.com/wiki/James_P._Sullivan
I like the shift to dialogue, a play-like approach, in the middle. Maybe you could do more with this, incorporating dialogue from the movie?
I love Sully!! Great job comparing him to a gorilla I never would have thought of that! You portrayed his inner struggle in a great way - his inner mesh with pain. As stated above it would have made it so much better if there was more dialogue and more information about Sully. It would be cool to see your take on what wasn't shown in the movie. Either way great job!
ReplyDeleteI love Sully!! Great job comparing him to a gorilla I never would have thought of that! You portrayed his inner struggle in a great way - his inner mesh with pain. As stated above it would have made it so much better if there was more dialogue and more information about Sully. It would be cool to see your take on what wasn't shown in the movie. Either way great job!
ReplyDeleteI loved this! Monster’s Inc. is one of my favorites. I liked how you incorporated both the points of view of Sully and of a child. It made the poem feel like a little story. My only suggestion would be to add more details about the characteristics of Sully and what he does, as someone would know what Monster’s Inc. was.
ReplyDeleteI really love this poem! Good job! I really enjoyed reading this poem, as you took the point of view of the monster, Sully, and then you also took the point of view from the small child. It makes it more interesting with more depth to the poem, rather than just the point of view only from the monster, or vice versa. I really like how you used such descriptive words for where the little child's parent should check. Specifically saying pink flowered sheets makes it very clear that it's a little girls room. And the overflowing hamper! Nice job.
ReplyDeleteGreat job with this poem! I like how you wrote the poem as the monster! I also like how there's a perspective from the child who is scared and the monster who doesn't only want to scare. It was so interesting! I love the line "which is my lands energy." You also gave great details that showed that the monster was scaring a little girl. For example, "chestnut drawers" and "flowered print sheets." I would love to read more! Maybe adding a little bit more of the dialogue with the little girl.
ReplyDeleteit is wonderful and excellent post, thanks for sharing with us.
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